STONE-PATIENCE and KNIFE-PATIENCE
by Unknown · from Turkish fairy tales and folk tales
Adapted Version
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Lily and her mother lived together. They had a small house. Lily sat by the window. A little bird flew in. It said, "Your future is sad!" The bird flew away. Lily felt scared. Her mother felt scared too.
Lily hid in a cupboard. Her mother closed the door. But the bird came again. It found Lily. It said, "Your future is sad!" Lily was very scared. Her mother was very sad.
Lily's friends came to visit. They asked Lily's mother. "Can Lily play with us?" they asked. Lily's mother said yes. Lily went out with her friends.
Lily and her friends played. They drank water from a well. Then a big wall grew up. It was very tall. The wall stood between Lily and her friends. Lily was now all alone.
Lily's friends went home. They were very sad. They told Lily's mother. Lily's mother ran to the wall. She talked sadly to Lily. Lily was inside the wall.
Lily fell asleep by the wall. She woke up the next day. A door was in the wall. Lily opened the door. She saw a big, beautiful palace.
Lily went inside. She saw Prince Amir. He was sleeping. A note was on his chest. It said, "Fan him forty days." "Then you find your happy future." Lily took a fan. She sat by Prince Amir.
Lily fanned Prince Amir. She fanned him for many days. It was the last day. Lily felt tired. She asked a Tricky Maid. "Please fan him for a bit."
Prince Amir woke up. He saw the Tricky Maid. He thought she was his love. He took her as his wife. Lily came back. She was very sad. She must work in the kitchen.
Prince Amir wanted to give gifts. He asked the Tricky Maid. She asked for a special dress. No one could make this dress. He asked Lily in the kitchen. Lily asked for a yellow stone. She asked for a small, shiny tool.
Prince Amir went on a ship. The ship could not move. It stopped in the water. Prince Amir knew why. He did not have Lily's gifts. He found a big man. The man gave him the stone and tool.
Prince Amir came home. He gave the dress to the maid. He put the stone and tool inside. He watched Lily. He wanted to know. What Lily would do.
Lily took the yellow stone. She took the small, shiny tool. She told them her sad story. The stone began to grow. It grew bigger and bigger. It showed all her sadness. Then the stone burst.
Lily was very, very sad. She dropped the small, shiny tool. Prince Amir came out. He saw Lily. He said, "You are my true love!" He knew Lily was good. He took Lily as his wife.
The Tricky Maid was sent away. Prince Amir sent for Lily's mother. Lily's mother came to the palace. They all lived happily. The little bird came. It sang, "Oh, Lily, your happy future came!"
Lily was patient and kind. Good things happen to patient and kind people. Her happy future came true.
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Original Story
STONE-PATIENCE AND KNIFE-PATIENCE
There was once a poor woman who had one daughter, and this poor woman used to go out and wash linen, while her daughter remained at home at her working-table. One day she was sitting by the window as was her wont, when a little bird flew on to the sewing-table and said to the damsel: “Oh, little damsel, poor little damsel! death is thy Kismet!”[13] whereupon it flew away again. From that hour the damsel’s peace of mind was gone, and in the evening she told her mother what the bird had said to her. “Close the door and the window,” said her mother, “and sit at thy work as usual.”
So the next morning she closed the door and the window and sat her down at her work. But all at once there came a “Whirr-r-r-r!” and there was the little bird again on the work-table. “Oh, little damsel, poor little damsel! death is thy Kismet,” and with that it flew away again. The damsel was more and more terrified than ever at these words, but her mother comforted her again: “To-morrow,” said she, “close fast the door and the window, and get into the cupboard. There light a candle, and go on with thy work!”
Scarcely had her mother departed with the dawn than the girl closed up everything, lit a candle, and locked herself in the cupboard with her work-table. But scarcely had she stitched two stitches when the bird stood before her again, and said: “Oh, little damsel, poor little damsel! death is thy Kismet!” and whirr-r-r-r! it flew away again. The damsel was in such distress that she scarce knew where she was. She threw her work aside, and began tormenting herself as to what this saying might mean. Her mother, too, could not get to the bottom of the matter, so she remained at home the next day, that she also might see the bird, but the bird did not come again.
So their sorrow was perpetual, and all the joy of their life was gone. They never stirred from the house but watched and waited continually, if perchance the bird might come again. One day the damsels of their neighbour came to them and asked the woman to let her daughter go with them. “If she went for a little outing,” said they, “she might forget her trouble.” The woman did not like to let her go, but they promised to take great care of her and not to lose sight of her, so at last she let her go.
So the damsels went into the fields and danced and diverted themselves till the day was on the decline. On the way home they sat down by a well and began to drink out of it. The poor woman’s daughter also went to drink of the water, when lo! a wall rose up between her and the other damsels, but such a wall as never the eye of man yet beheld. A voice could not get beyond it, it was so high, and a man could not get through it, it was so hard. Oh, how terrified was the poor woman’s daughter, and what weeping and wailing and despair there was among her comrades. What would become of the poor girl, and what would become of her poor mother!
“I will not tell,” said one of them, “for she will not believe us!”—“But what shall we say to her mother,” cried another, “now that she has disappeared from before our eyes?”—“It is thy fault, it is thy fault!” “Twas thou that asked her!” “No, ’twas thou.” So they fell to blaming each other, looking all the time at the great wall.
Meanwhile the mother was awaiting her daughter. She stood at the door of the house and watched the damsels coming. The damsels came weeping sore, and scarce dared to tell the poor woman what had befallen her daughter. The woman rushed to the
The Poor Woman and the Three Damsels.—p. 190.
great wall, her daughter was inside it and she herself was outside, and so they wept and wailed so long as either of them had a tear to flow.
In the midst of this great weeping the damsel fell asleep, and when she woke up next morning she saw a great door beside the wall. “Happen to me what may, if I am to perish, let me perish, but open this door I will!”—so she opened it. Beyond the door was a beautiful palace, the like of which is not to be seen even in dreams. This palace had a vast hall, and on the wall of this hall hung forty keys. The damsel took the keys and began opening the doors of all the rooms around her, and the first set of rooms was full of silver, and the second set full of gold, and the third set full of diamonds, and the fourth set full of emeralds—in a word, each set of rooms was full of stones more precious than the precious things of the rooms before it, so that the eyes of the damsel were almost blinded by their splendour.
She entered the fortieth room, and there, extended on the floor, was a beautiful Bey, with a fan of pearls beside him, and on his breast a piece of paper with these words written on it: “Whoever fans me for forty days and prays all that time by my side will find her Kismet!” Then the damsel thought of the little bird. So it was by the side of this sleeper that she was to meet her fate! So she made her ablutions, and, taking the fan in her hand, she sat down beside the Bey. Day and night she kept on fanning him, praying continually till the fortieth day was at hand. And on the morning of the last day she peeped out of the window and beheld a negro girl in front of the palace. Then she thought she would call this girl for a moment and ask her to pray beside the Bey, while she herself made her ablutions and took a little repose. So she called the negro girl and set her beside the Bey, that she might pray beside him and fan his face. But the damsel hastened away and made her ablutions and adorned herself, so that the Bey, when he awoke, might see his life’s Kismet at her best and rejoice at the sight.
Meanwhile the black girl read the piece of paper, and while the white damsel tarried the youth awoke. He looked about him, and scarcely did he see the black girl than he embraced her and called her his wife. The poor white damsel could scarce believe her own eyes when she entered the room; but the black girl, who was jealous of her, said to the Bey: “I, a Sultan’s daughter, am not ashamed to go about just as I am, and this chit of a serving-maid dares to appear before me arrayed so finely!” Then she chased her out of the room, and sent her to the kitchen to finish her work and boil and fry. The Bey was surprised, but he would not say a word, for the negro girl was his bride, while the other damsel was only a kitchen-wench.
Now the Feast of Bairam fell about this time, and as is the custom at such times, the Bey would fain have given gifts to them of his household. So he went to the negress and asked her what she would like on the Feast of Bairam. And the negress asked for a garment that never a needle had sewn and never scissors had cut. Then he went down into the kitchen and asked the damsel what she would like. “The stone-of-patience has a yellow colour, and the knife-of-patience has a brown handle, bring them both to me,” said the damsel. So the Bey went on his way, and got the negress her garment, but the stone-of-patience and the knife-of-patience he could find nowhere. What was he to do?—he could not return home without the gifts. So he got on board his ship.
The ship had only got half-way when suddenly it stopped short, and could neither go backwards nor forwards. The captain was terrified, and told his passengers that there was some one on board who had not kept his word, and that was why they could not get on. Then the Bey came forward, and said that he it was who had not kept his word. So they put the Bey ashore, that he might keep his promise and then return back to the ship. Then the Bey walked along the sea-shore, and from the sea-shore he came to a great valley, and he went wandering on and on till he stood beside a large spring. And he had scarce trodden on the stones around it when suddenly a huge negro stood before him and asked him what he wanted.
“The stone-of-patience is of a yellow colour and the knife-of-patience has a brown sheath, bring them both to me!” said the Bey to the negro. And the next moment both the stone and the knife were in his hand, and he came back to the ship, went on board, and returned home. He gave the garment to his wife, but the stone and the knife he put in the kitchen. But the Bey was curious to know what the damsel would do with them, so one evening he crept down into the kitchen and watched her.
When night approached she took the knife in her hand and placed the stone in front of her and began telling them her story. She told them what the little bird had thrice told her, and in what great terror both her mother and herself had fallen.
And while she was looking at the stone it suddenly began to swell, and its yellow hue hissed and bubbled as if there were life in it.
Then the damsel went on to say how she had wandered into the palace of the Bey, how she had prayed forty days beside him, and how she had entrusted the negress with the praying while she went to wash and dress herself.
And the yellow stone swelled again, and hissed and foamed as if it were about to burst.
Then the damsel told how the negress had deceived her, how instead of her the Bey had taken the negress to wife.
And all this time the yellow stone went on swelling and hissing and foaming as if there were a real living heart inside it, till suddenly it burst and turned to ashes.
Then the damsel took the little knife by the handle and said: “Oh, thou yellow patience-stone, thou wert but a stone, and yet thou couldst not endure that I, a tender little damsel, a poor little damsel, should thus be thrust out.” And with that she would have buried the knife in her breast, but the Bey rushed forward and snatched away the knife.
“Thou art my real true Kismet,” cried the youth, as he took her into the upper chamber in the place of the negress. But the treacherous negress they slew, and they sent for the damsel’s mother and all lived together with great joy.
And the little bird came sometimes and perched in the window of the palace, and sang his joyful lay. And this is what he sang: “Oh, little damsel, happy little damsel, that hast found thy Kismet!”
Story DNA
Moral
Patience and endurance in the face of adversity will ultimately lead to one's true destiny and happiness.
Plot Summary
A poor damsel is repeatedly forewarned of her 'Kismet' by a mysterious bird, causing her great fear. She is then magically separated from her friends by a wall, behind which she discovers a palace and a sleeping Bey, whom she must fan for forty days to fulfill her destiny. On the final day, a deceitful negro girl usurps her place, claiming the Bey as her husband and relegating the true damsel to servitude. Later, the Bey, seeking gifts, is led to acquire magical 'stone-of-patience' and 'knife-of-patience' for the damsel. When the damsel recounts her suffering to these objects, the stone bursts, and as she prepares to end her life, the Bey intervenes, recognizing her as his true Kismet, and they live happily ever after.
Themes
Emotional Arc
terror to despair to patient suffering to triumph
Writing Style
Narrative Elements
Cultural Context
The story reflects themes common in many cultures regarding fate, patience, and the triumph of virtue over deceit, often with a clear moral outcome.
Plot Beats (15)
- A little bird repeatedly tells a poor damsel that 'death is her Kismet,' causing her and her mother great fear.
- Despite attempts to hide, the bird finds her, intensifying her terror and leading to perpetual sorrow for both mother and daughter.
- The damsel's neighbors convince her mother to let her go on an outing with them to cheer her up.
- While drinking from a well, an unbreachable wall suddenly rises, separating the damsel from her friends.
- The friends return home, distraught, and inform the mother, who rushes to the wall to weep with her daughter, separated.
- The damsel falls asleep and awakens to find a door in the wall, leading to a magnificent palace.
- Inside, she finds a sleeping Bey and a note instructing her to fan him for forty days to find her Kismet.
- On the fortieth day, she briefly leaves to freshen up, asking a negro girl to take her place.
- The Bey awakens, sees the negro girl, and mistakenly takes her as his wife, while the true damsel is relegated to kitchen work.
- During Bairam, the Bey seeks gifts; the negro girl asks for an impossible garment, and the damsel asks for the 'stone-of-patience' and 'knife-of-patience'.
- The Bey's ship is magically stopped until he obtains the stone and knife, which he finally gets from a giant negro.
- The Bey returns, gives the gifts, and secretly watches the damsel in the kitchen.
- The damsel recounts her entire story to the stone and knife; the stone swells and bursts as she describes her suffering and betrayal.
- As she prepares to stab herself with the knife, the Bey intervenes, declares her his true Kismet, and takes her as his wife.
- The treacherous negro girl is slain, the damsel's mother is brought to the palace, and they all live happily, with the bird singing a joyful song about her found Kismet.
Characters
The Damsel
Slender build, average height for a young woman. Her features are delicate, reflecting a life of quiet work and later, sorrow. She appears somewhat frail due to her distress.
Attire: Initially, simple, practical garments suitable for a poor working girl, likely a modest tunic or dress made of coarse linen or cotton in muted colors. Later, when she adorns herself for the Bey, she would wear a more elegant, perhaps embroidered, dress of finer fabric and brighter colors, though still reflecting a refined modesty rather than ostentation. In the kitchen, she would revert to simpler, more durable clothing.
Wants: To understand and ultimately fulfill her 'Kismet' (fate), to find peace and happiness, and to escape the dread of the bird's prophecy.
Flaw: Naivety and excessive trust, particularly in the negro girl, and a tendency towards despair, almost leading her to suicide.
Transforms from a fearful, passive girl tormented by fate into a resilient woman who actively seeks her destiny, endures betrayal, and ultimately finds her rightful place and happiness. She learns to trust her inner strength and that patience is rewarded.
Pious, diligent, fearful, patient, resilient, trusting (to a fault).
The Poor Woman
A woman of mature age, likely with a worn but resilient appearance from a life of hard work. Her build might be sturdy, reflecting her labor.
Attire: Simple, durable peasant clothing, likely a long dress or tunic made of coarse, undyed or earth-toned fabric, possibly with a practical apron. Her clothes would be clean but well-worn.
Wants: To protect her daughter from harm and sorrow, and to understand the meaning of the bird's prophecy.
Flaw: Her inability to fully protect her daughter from fate, leading to deep sorrow.
Experiences profound sorrow and despair when her daughter disappears, but ultimately finds joy and reunion. Her arc is one of enduring maternal love and eventual relief.
Loving, protective, practical, worried, resilient.
The Little Bird
A small, ordinary-looking bird, perhaps a sparrow or finch, with no extraordinary features initially, making its pronouncements more startling. Its size emphasizes its unexpected power.
Attire: Natural feathers.
Wants: To deliver the prophecy of the Damsel's Kismet, acting as an agent of fate.
Flaw: None apparent, as it is an agent of fate.
Starts as an omen of dread, but transforms into a harbinger of joy, confirming the Damsel's fulfilled Kismet.
Mysterious, prophetic, seemingly cruel but ultimately benevolent.
The Bey
A handsome young man of noble bearing, with a strong, athletic build. His appearance would reflect his status and health.
Attire: Rich, flowing robes of fine silk or brocade, perhaps in deep jewel tones like sapphire or emerald, with intricate embroidery. He would wear a turban, possibly adorned with jewels, and fine leather slippers. His attire would be indicative of wealth and high status.
Wants: To awaken from his enchanted sleep, to find his true Kismet, and to uphold justice once he understands the truth.
Flaw: His initial passivity and susceptibility to deception due to his enchanted state and the Negro Girl's manipulation.
Awakens from a magical sleep, is initially deceived, but through his curiosity and the Damsel's story, he discovers the truth and corrects the injustice, finding his true love.
Noble, honorable, curious, somewhat passive (initially), just.
The Negro Girl
A young woman of strong presence, likely with a robust build. Her features would be striking and perhaps sharp, reflecting her cunning nature.
Attire: Initially, simple, perhaps worn clothing as she appears to be a common girl. Once she assumes the role of the Bey's wife, she would wear rich garments, possibly even more ostentatious than the Damsel's, to assert her new status, though the story implies she initially appears 'just as I am' before demanding a special garment. Her clothing would be of fine fabrics, perhaps bold colors, reflecting her desire for status.
Wants: To usurp the Damsel's place, gain wealth and status, and secure the Bey as her husband.
Flaw: Her overwhelming jealousy and deceit, which ultimately lead to her downfall.
Rises from obscurity through deception to a position of power and luxury, only to be exposed and meet a violent end due to her treachery.
Treacherous, jealous, cunning, manipulative, arrogant, cruel.
Locations
Poor Woman's Cottage
A humble, simple dwelling, likely a traditional Ottoman-era house with a working-table by a window, and a small cupboard for storage. The interior would be modest, reflecting the family's poverty.
Mood: Anxious, fearful, later sorrowful and watchful.
The damsel first hears the bird's prophecy; she tries to hide from her Kismet.
The Mysterious Wall and Well
A vast, impossibly high and hard wall that rises suddenly from the ground, separating the damsel from her companions. It stands near a well in open fields, likely in a Mediterranean or Middle Eastern landscape.
Mood: Terrifying, despairing, mysterious, isolating.
The damsel is supernaturally separated from her friends and trapped, marking the beginning of her true journey.
The Bey's Palace
A magnificent Ottoman-era palace, beyond dreams, with a vast hall, forty rooms, and opulent treasures. The architecture features grand arches, possibly intricate tilework, and rich textiles, reflecting immense wealth.
Mood: Magical, opulent, initially hopeful, later tense and deceptive.
The damsel finds her Kismet, fans the Bey for forty days, is betrayed, and later reveals her story.
Seashore and Great Valley
A rugged seashore leading to a vast, desolate valley, likely in a Mediterranean or Middle Eastern setting. The valley contains a large spring, surrounded by stones.
Mood: Mysterious, remote, challenging.
The Bey searches for the stone-of-patience and knife-of-patience, encountering a magical guardian.