Wenn Man Mit

by Unknown · from Japanische Märchen

folk tale moral tale humorous Ages 5-10 774 words 4 min read

Adapted Version

CEFR A1 Age 5 332 words 2 min Canon 100/100

Once there was a farmer named Ben. He had a big bump on his right cheek. One day, a storm came. Ben ran into a hollow tree. He found shelter there.

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Night came. Ben heard happy sounds. He saw many Goblins. They had strange faces. They drank special juice. The Goblins sang and danced.

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Ben felt brave. He came out of the tree. He spoke to the Goblins. "I can dance better!" he said. Ben started to dance. He moved his feet fast.

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The Goblins loved his dance. They asked him to come back. "Come tomorrow night!" they said. The Goblin Leader took Ben's bump. It was a special promise. Ben felt no pain.

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Ben woke up. His cheek was smooth. The big bump was gone. He was very happy. The village people saw him. They were very surprised. Ben did not tell them everything.

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Another farmer lived there. His name was Sam. Sam had a bump too. It was on his left cheek. Sam heard about Ben. He wanted the same luck. Sam felt jealous.

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Sam went to the forest. He found the same tree. He hid inside it. The Goblins came. They waited for Ben. They did not see Sam.

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The Goblins looked sad. "Our friend is not here," they said. Sam jumped out. "I am here!" he cried. He wanted to dance.

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Sam was not a good dancer. He moved in a clumsy way. His dance was not fun. The Goblins did not like it. They did not laugh.

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The Goblins were angry. "Go away!" they said. The Goblin Leader took Ben's bump. He threw it at Sam. *Plop!* It stuck to Sam's right cheek.

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Sam went home. He had two bumps now. One on his left cheek. One on his right cheek. Sam wanted what Ben had. But trying to copy others can make things worse.

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Original Story 774 words · 4 min read

Wenn man mit

Kobolden tanzt!

n alter Zeit lebte einmal ein Landmann, der hatte auf der rechten Wange eine große Geschwulst, groß wie eine Birne. Als dieser Landmann eines Tages in den Wald ging um Reisig zu sammeln, wurde er von einem Gewitter überrascht und flüchtete in einen hohlen Baum, wo er Schutz vor dem Regen fand. Als das Gewitter endlich aufhörte, war es Nacht geworden und der Landmann konnte den Weg nach Hause nicht finden; deshalb blieb er in der Höhlung des Baumes sitzen und erwartete den Morgen.

Im Walde aber war es sehr einsam und schaurig und der Mann konnte vor Angst und Furcht nicht schlafen. Gegen Mitternacht hörte er plötzlich Stimmen und lautes Lachen. Verwundert streckte er den Kopf hervor und sah eine Anzahl Kobolde mit den sonderbarsten Gesichtern und in verschiedener Gestalt. Diese hatten gerade in der Nähe des Baumes, in dem der Landmann saß, Platz genommen und ergötzten sich am Trunk. Als sie genug getrunken hatten, begannen sie zu singen und zu tanzen. Der Landmann, der gern tanzte und ebenso gern einen guten Trunk Sake1 zu sich genommen hätte, konnte es in seinem Versteck nicht länger aushalten, denn die Lust der Kobolde wirkte auf ihn ansteckend.

Er kam also hervor und näherte sich den Tanzenden, die, als sie einen Menschen erblickten, erschraken und forteilen wollten. Er rief ihnen aber zu: „Bleibt nur da, ich will euch nur zeigen, wie man besser tanzt!“ Und gleich darauf begann er sich lustig im Tanze zu drehen.

Die Kobolde freuten sich über sein Tanzen und versuchten es ihm nachzumachen, auch gaben sie ihm zu essen und zu trinken.

War das eine Fröhlichkeit! Sie dauerte bis der Morgen graute.

Da sprachen die Kobolde: „Du hast uns durch deine Gesellschaft hocherfreut. Komme doch auch morgen nacht wieder!“

Der Landmann sagte dies zu; aber die Kobolde wollten ein Unterpfand haben, daß er auch sicherlich käme. „Weißt du“, sagten sie zu ihm, „wir werden zur Sicherheit deine Geschwulst nehmen, du kannst sie dann morgen wieder bekommen.“

Damit griff der Sprecher gleich an die Wange des Mannes und nahm ihm die Geschwulst fort, ohne daß er einen Schmerz verspürte. Hierauf eilten alle lachend fort, ihm zurufend, nicht zu vergessen wieder zu kommen.

Der Landmann befühlte seine Wange, sie war ganz glatt und hatte keine Spur der Geschwulst mehr, nicht einmal eine Narbe; er war darüber außerordentlich froh und nahm sich vor, diesen Platz in Zukunft zu meiden und den Kobolden aus dem Wege zu gehen; denn er hatte gar kein Verlangen die Geschwulst wieder zu bekommen.

Er ging also zufrieden nach Hause, wo alle ihn verwundert anstaunten, daß er seine Geschwulst ohne jede Spur verloren hatte. Er erzählte dann, welches Glück ihm die Kobolde für sein Tanzen bereiteten, verschwieg aber kluger Weise, daß sie ihm die Geschwulst nur als Unterpfand für sein Wiederkommen abgenommen hatten.

Nun wohnte in dem Dorfe noch ein Landmann mit einer Geschwulst auf der Wange. Dieser hatte die Geschwulst auf der linken Seite.

Als er von dem Glück seines Nachbarn hörte, wollte auch er seiner Geschwulst los werden und ließ sich den Platz genau beschreiben, wo der erste Landmann die Kobolde getroffen hatte.

In der Nacht ging er dorthin und traf die Kobolde auch wirklich an. Er wollte aber erst hören, was sie sagten und versteckte sich daher in dieselbe Höhlung, in der in der Nacht vorher der andere Landmann gesteckt hatte.

Die Kobolde aber sprachen nicht viel, sondern schauten sich von Zeit zu Zeit erwartend um, bis endlich einer sagte: „Unser Freund von gestern scheint heute nicht zu kommen!“

Als dies der Landmann hörte, sprang er tanzend hervor und rief: „Da bin ich schon!“

Nun freuten sich alle, gaben ihm zu trinken und forderten ihn dann auf wieder seine Kunst zu zeigen.

Er war aber ein ungeschickter Tänzer; auch konnte er nicht viel Sake vertragen, sodaß sein Tanz noch ungeschickter war und er steif und torkelnd umherhopste. Es war den Kobolden kein Vergnügen, dem Manne zuzuschauen und so riefen sie: „Du bist heute nicht so geschickt wie gestern und wir haben heute keine Freude an deiner Gesellschaft. Mach, daß du fort kommst und laß dich nie wieder bei uns sehen; da wir von dir keine Erinnerung wünschen, so hast du hier deine Geschwulst wieder!“

Der eine Kobold zog sie aus der Tasche und warf sie dem verdutzten Manne ins Gesicht, klitsch — klatsch — saß sie an der rechten Wange. Dann stieß man ihn fort und er mußte jetzt mit zwei Geschwülsten heimkehren. —

Das kommt davon, wenn man neidischen Sinnes das gleiche Glück besitzen will, das andere genießen!

1. Sake = aus Reis bereiteter, stark alkoholhaltiger Wein, der heiß getrunken wird.


Story DNA

Moral

Envy and greed can lead to worse outcomes than one started with, especially when trying to replicate another's good fortune without genuine merit.

Plot Summary

A landman with a large tumor on his cheek encounters dancing goblins in the forest. He joins their revelry, impressing them with his dance, and they painlessly remove his tumor as a pledge for his return. Delighted to be rid of it, he decides not to go back. An envious second landman, hearing of this, seeks out the goblins to lose his own tumor. However, his clumsy dancing displeases them, and as punishment, they throw the first landman's tumor onto his other cheek, leaving him with two tumors.

Themes

greedenvyconsequencesauthenticity

Emotional Arc

fear to joy to relief for one; envy to hope to despair for the other

Writing Style

Voice: third person omniscient
Pacing: moderate
Descriptive: sparse
Techniques: rule of two (two landmen, two tumors)

Narrative Elements

Conflict: person vs self (greed/envy)
Ending: moral justice
Magic: goblins (Kobolde), magical removal/placement of tumors
the tumor (symbolizing a burden or flaw)the hollow tree (a place of transition/encounter)

Cultural Context

Origin: German
Era: timeless fairy tale

This tale is a variant of a common folktale motif found across various cultures, often involving spirits or magical beings who reward or punish based on character.

Plot Beats (11)

  1. A landman with a large tumor on his right cheek is caught in a storm and hides in a hollow tree.
  2. He overhears and then sees a group of goblins singing, drinking, and dancing.
  3. Overcoming his fear, he emerges and offers to show them how to dance better, joining their merriment.
  4. The goblins are delighted by his dancing and invite him to return the next night, taking his tumor as a pledge.
  5. The landman wakes up, finds his cheek smooth and tumor-free, and decides to avoid the goblins, much to his relief and the village's astonishment.
  6. A second landman, who has a tumor on his left cheek, hears of his neighbor's good fortune and, driven by envy, seeks out the goblins.
  7. He hides in the same tree, waiting for the goblins, who are expecting the first landman.
  8. When the goblins express disappointment that their friend hasn't returned, the second landman jumps out, claiming to be there.
  9. He attempts to dance for them but is clumsy and uncoordinated, failing to entertain the goblins.
  10. Displeased, the goblins tell him to leave and, as a parting gift, throw the first landman's tumor onto his right cheek.
  11. The second landman returns home with two tumors, one on each cheek.

Characters

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The First Landmann

human adult male

A man of average height and build, distinguished by a large, pear-sized growth on his right cheek. His skin is likely weathered from outdoor work.

Attire: Simple, practical clothing suitable for a farmer in an old European setting. Likely a coarse linen or wool tunic, sturdy trousers, and possibly a simple cap. Colors would be earthy and muted.

Wants: To find shelter from the storm, to alleviate his fear, to enjoy himself, and ultimately, to be rid of his facial growth.

Flaw: His initial fear and the physical burden of his growth.

Transforms from a fearful man burdened by a physical deformity into a joyful, unburdened individual who has learned to embrace unexpected opportunities.

His right cheek, initially with a large, pear-shaped growth, later completely smooth.

Fearful (initially), sociable, joyful, clever, opportunistic, appreciative.

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The Goblins' Spokesman

goblin ageless non-human

One of a group of goblins, described as having 'the most peculiar faces and various forms.' This particular goblin is the one who speaks for the group and physically removes the growth. He is likely small, perhaps gnarled, with disproportionate features.

Attire: Simple, rustic, and perhaps tattered garments made of natural materials like leaves, bark, or roughspun cloth, in earthy tones. No specific details are given, but it would be whimsical and naturalistic.

Wants: To enjoy themselves, to find entertainment, and to ensure the return of their 'pledge'.

Flaw: Perhaps a short attention span or a preference for immediate gratification.

Remains consistent as a playful, magical entity.

His hand reaching out to magically remove or reattach a facial growth.

Playful, mischievous, appreciative of good entertainment, decisive, somewhat transactional.

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The Goblins (collective)

goblin ageless non-human

A group of small, varied creatures with 'the most peculiar faces and in various forms.' They are likely grotesque yet whimsical, with features like pointed ears, long noses, or disproportionate limbs.

Attire: Each goblin might have slightly different, but consistently rustic and naturalistic attire – perhaps tunics made of leaves, bark, or roughspun cloth, in earthy and muted colors. Some might have small caps or adornments of berries or feathers.

Wants: To enjoy themselves, to sing, dance, and drink.

Flaw: Their fickle nature and desire for constant entertainment.

Remain consistent in their nature, serving as a catalyst for the human characters' transformations.

A group of small, oddly shaped figures dancing wildly around a fire, their faces contorted in various expressions of mirth.

Playful, easily entertained, boisterous, appreciative of good dancing and drink, but also easily displeased by poor performance.

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The Second Landmann

human adult male

A man of average height and build, similar to the first, but distinguished by a growth on his left cheek. His skin is likely weathered from outdoor work.

Attire: Simple, practical clothing suitable for a farmer in an old European setting. Likely a coarse linen or wool tunic, sturdy trousers, and possibly a simple cap. Colors would be earthy and muted.

Wants: To rid himself of his facial growth and achieve the same 'luck' as his neighbor, driven by envy.

Flaw: His envy, clumsiness, and inability to genuinely entertain or understand the goblins' preferences.

Begins with a single growth and ends with two, demonstrating the negative consequences of envy and poor imitation.

His face, initially with a growth on the left cheek, later with two growths – one on each cheek.

Envious, greedy, unskillful, clumsy, opportunistic, unperceptive.

Locations

Deep Forest

outdoor night Stormy, rainy, humid, then clear night

A dense, ancient forest with tall, gnarled trees, their branches intertwining to form a thick canopy. The ground is covered with fallen leaves and twigs, and the air is damp and cool. A strong thunderstorm rages, making the forest dark and eerie even during the day.

Mood: Eerie, isolated, mysterious, then lively and festive

The first farmer gets lost and seeks shelter, later encounters the goblins.

Gnarled ancient trees Dense canopy Fallen leaves and twigs Rain-soaked ground Thunderstorm

Hollow Tree

transitional night Cool, damp after rain

A massive, ancient tree with a large, dark hollow in its trunk, providing a snug, hidden refuge. The interior is rough and earthy, offering shelter from the elements. It's a place of concealment and observation, looking out into a small clearing.

Mood: Confined, secretive, observant, then a place of revelation

Both farmers hide here to observe the goblins before revealing themselves.

Massive tree trunk Dark hollow interior Rough, earthy walls Small opening looking out

Goblin Clearing

outdoor night Clear, cool night

A small, secluded clearing within the deep forest, illuminated by an unseen light source, possibly magical. The ground is suitable for dancing, and there are signs of a lively gathering, with sake being consumed. The atmosphere is initially boisterous and joyful, then becomes awkward and dismissive.

Mood: Festive, joyful, magical, then awkward and unwelcoming

The goblins hold their nightly revels, where the first farmer dances and loses his growth, and the second farmer attempts to dance and gains another.

Open ground for dancing Unseen light source (magical) Sake cups/bottles Goblins of various strange forms