HISS
by George MacDonald · from The Light Princess and Other Fairy Stories
Adapted Version
Princess Lily loved her lake very much. She swam in it each day. The water was blue and clear.
One night, she swam with Prince Leo. She felt the water. It was not deep. She felt sad. She swam to shore fast. Prince Leo followed her. He asked, "Are you ill?" She did not answer. She swam home.
Next day, Princess Lily looked. She saw the banks were dry. The grass was dying. The lake was getting small. It was true. The water went down. Princess Lily felt very sad.
Mean Aunt Hilda was not happy. Princess Lily loved the lake. Aunt Hilda was angry. She wanted to do bad. She laughed a mean laugh. Shadow, her black cat, was scared.
Aunt Hilda went to a chest. She took out dry seaweed. She put it in water. She added powder. She said magic words. A big white snake woke up. It came from the tub. It was a magic snake.
Aunt Hilda took many keys. They were rusty. She went to her cellar. She opened a door. She went down steps. She opened many doors. She went down more steps. She came to a big cave. This cave was under the lake.
Aunt Hilda let the snake go. She held it up. The snake reached the roof. The roof was the lake bottom. The snake stuck itself there. It began to suck water. It sucked the lake water.
Aunt Hilda watched the snake. Shadow, her cat, watched too. The snake sucked water. Seven days passed. Seven nights passed. Aunt Hilda waited and watched.
The snake dropped. It was tired. It was small again. Aunt Hilda saw one water drop. She ran away fast. Shadow followed her. She closed the doors. She heard water rushing. She was happy.
Aunt Hilda still wanted to be mean. She took magic water. She went around the lake. Shadow went with her. She made magic. She made streams dry up. She made springs dry up.
All water stopped flowing. Rivers were dry. Springs were dry. There was no water at all. It was a big problem. No water for anyone. Not even little children. All were sad.
Now, there was no water for anyone. No water for Princess Lily. No water for the creatures. No water at all. Being mean made all sad. It caused big problems for all.
Original Story
XI. HISS!
The princess's pleasure in the lake had grown to a passion, and she could scarcely bear to be out of it for an hour. Imagine then her consternation, when, diving with the prince one night, a sudden suspicion seized her that the lake was not so deep as it used to be. The prince could not imagine what had happened. She shot to the surface, and, without a word, swam at full speed towards the higher side of the lake. He followed, begging to know if she was ill, or what was the matter. She never turned her head, or took the smallest notice of his question. Arrived at the shore, she coasted the rocks with minute inspection. But she was not able to come to a conclusion, for the moon was very small, and so she could not see well. She turned therefore and swam home, without saying a word to explain her conduct to the prince, of whose presence she seemed no longer conscious. He withdrew to his cave, in great perplexity and distress.
Next day she made many observations, which, alas! strengthened her fears. She saw that the banks were too dry; and that the grass on the shore, and the trailing plants on the rocks, were withering away. She caused marks to be made along the borders, and examined them, day after day, in all directions of the wind; till at last the horrible idea became a certain fact—that the surface of the lake was slowly sinking.
The poor princess nearly went out of the little mind she had. It was awful to her to see the lake, which she loved more than any living thing, lie dying before her eyes. It sank away, slowly vanishing. The tops of rocks that had never been seen till now, began to appear far down in the clear water. Before long they were dry in the sun. It was fearful to think of the mud that would soon lie there baking and festering, full of lovely creatures dying, and ugly creatures coming to life, like the unmaking of a world. And how hot the sun would be without any lake! She could not bear to swim in it any more, and began to pine away. Her life seemed bound up with it; and ever as the lake sank, she pined. People said she would not live an hour after the lake was gone.
But she never cried.
Proclamation was made to all the kingdom, that whosoever should discover the cause of the lake's decrease, would be rewarded after a princely fashion. Hum-Drum and Kopy-Keck applied themselves to their physics and metaphysics; but in vain. Not even they could suggest a cause.
Now the fact was that the old princess was at the root of the mischief. When she heard that her niece found more pleasure in the water than anyone else out of it, she went into a rage, and cursed herself for her want of foresight.
"But," said she, "I will soon set all right. The king and the people shall die of thirst; their brains shall boil and frizzle in their skulls before I will lose my revenge."
And she laughed a ferocious laugh, that made the hairs on the back of her black cat stand erect with terror.
Then she went to an old chest in the room, and opening it, took out what looked like a piece of dried seaweed. This she threw into a tub of water. Then she threw some powder into the water, and stirred it with her bare arm, muttering over it words of hideous sound, and yet more hideous import. Then she set the tub aside, and took from the chest a huge bunch of a hundred rusty keys, that clattered in her shaking hands. Then she sat down and proceeded to oil them all. Before she had finished, out from the tub, the water of which had kept on a slow motion ever since she had ceased stirring it, came the head and half the body of a huge gray snake. But the witch did not look round. It grew out of the tub, waving itself backwards and forwards with a slow horizontal motion, till it reached the princess, when it laid its head upon her shoulder, and gave a low hiss in her ear. She started—but with joy; and seeing the head resting on her shoulder, drew it towards her and kissed it. Then she drew it all out of the tub, and wound it round her body. It was one of those dreadful creatures which few have ever beheld—the White Snakes of Darkness.
Then she took the keys and went down to her cellar; and as she unlocked the door she said to herself,—
"This is worth living for!"
Locking the door behind her, she descended a few steps into the cellar, and crossing it, unlocked another door into a dark, narrow passage. She locked this also behind her, and descended a few more steps. If anyone had followed the witch-princess, he would have heard her unlock exactly one hundred doors, and descend a few steps after unlocking each. When she had unlocked the last, she entered a vast cave, the roof of which was supported by huge natural pillars of rock. Now this roof was the under side of the bottom of the lake.
She then untwined the snake from her body, and held it by the tail high above her. The hideous creature stretched up its head towards the roof of the cavern, which it was just able to reach. It then began to move its head backwards and forwards, with a slow oscillating motion, as if looking for something. At the same moment the witch began to walk round and round the cavern, coming nearer to the centre every circuit; while the head of the snake described the same path over the roof that she did over the floor, for she kept holding it up. And still it kept slowly oscillating. Round and round the cavern they went, ever lessening the circuit, till at last the snake made a sudden dart, and clung to the roof with its mouth.
"That's right, my beauty!" cried the princess; "drain it dry."
She let it go, left it hanging, and sat down on a great stone, with her black cat, which had followed her all round the cave, by her side. Then she began to knit and mutter awful words. The snake hung like a huge leech, sucking at the stone; the cat stood with his back arched, and his tail like a piece of cable, looking up at the snake; and the old woman sat and knitted and muttered. Seven days and seven nights they remained thus; when suddenly the serpent dropped from the roof as if exhausted, and shrivelled up till it was again like a piece of dried seaweed. The witch started to her feet, picked it up, put it in her pocket, and looked up at the roof. One drop of water was trembling on the spot where the snake had been sucking. As soon as she saw that, she turned and fled, followed by her cat. Shutting the door in a terrible hurry, she locked it, and having muttered some frightful words, sped to the next, which also she locked and muttered over; and so with all the hundred doors, till she arrived in her own cellar. There she sat down on the floor ready to faint, but listening with malicious delight to the rushing of the water, which she could hear distinctly through all the hundred doors.
But this was not enough. Now that she had tasted revenge, she lost her patience. Without further measures, the lake would be too long in disappearing. So the next night, with the last shred of the dying old moon rising, she took some of the water in which she had revived the snake, put it in a bottle, and set out, accompanied by her cat. Before morning she had made the entire circuit of the lake, muttering fearful words as she crossed every stream, and casting into it some of the water out of her bottle. When she had finished the circuit she muttered yet again, and flung a handful of water towards the moon. Thereupon every spring in the country ceased to throb and bubble, dying away like the pulse of a dying man. The next day there was no sound of falling water to be heard along the borders of the lake. The very courses were dry; and the mountains showed no silvery streaks down their dark sides. And not alone had the fountains of mother Earth ceased to flow; for all the babies throughout the country were crying dreadfully—only without tears.
Story DNA
Moral
Unchecked malice and revenge can lead to widespread destruction and suffering, even for those who are innocent.
Plot Summary
A princess's beloved lake mysteriously begins to shrink, causing her to pine away with despair. Unbeknownst to the kingdom, a jealous old princess is orchestrating this disaster as revenge. She uses a magical White Snake of Darkness to drain the lake from a hidden cavern beneath it, then further curses all the land's springs and streams. The story ends with the entire country suffering from a devastating drought, as all water sources cease to flow, leaving even babies crying without tears.
Themes
Emotional Arc
joy to despair to further suffering
Writing Style
Narrative Elements
Cultural Context
George MacDonald was a Victorian author known for his fantasy works, often imbued with Christian allegory, though this particular excerpt focuses on a more direct magical conflict.
Plot Beats (11)
- The princess, deeply in love with the lake, suspects its depth is decreasing during a night swim with the prince.
- She investigates the next day and confirms her fears: the lake is slowly but surely sinking, causing her to pine away.
- A proclamation is made for anyone to discover the cause, but no one can.
- The old, wicked princess, consumed by jealousy of her niece's love for the lake, decides to enact her revenge.
- She revives a dried 'White Snake of Darkness' in a tub with a magical powder and mutters hideous words.
- The old princess takes a hundred rusty keys and descends through a hundred locked doors into a vast cavern beneath the lake.
- She unleashes the White Snake, which attaches itself to the cavern roof (the lake's bottom) and begins to suck the water.
- For seven days and nights, the old princess knits and mutters while the snake drains the lake.
- The snake drops, shriveled, and the old princess, seeing a single drop of water, flees, locking all hundred doors behind her, listening to the rushing water.
- Still not satisfied, the old princess takes the magical water and curses every stream and spring around the lake, causing them to dry up.
- As a result, all natural water sources cease to flow, and even babies cry without tears, signifying a complete and devastating drought.
Characters
The Princess ★ protagonist
Slender and graceful, with an ethereal quality, almost as if she is more at home in water than on land. Her movements are fluid and swift, especially when swimming.
Attire: When out of the water, she would wear simple, flowing garments appropriate for a princess of a northern European fairy tale, perhaps a light linen gown in muted blues or greens, allowing for ease of movement. When in the lake, she would be unadorned.
Wants: To preserve the lake, which she loves more than anything and whose fate is intertwined with her own life.
Flaw: Her life force is inextricably linked to the lake, making her vulnerable to its decline. She also struggles to communicate her distress, withdrawing into herself.
She begins as someone who finds pure joy in the lake but quickly descends into despair and pining as the lake diminishes. Her arc is one of suffering and a desperate fight for survival, both for herself and the lake.
Deeply sensitive, passionate, observant, melancholic, determined.
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A young woman with a slender build and a delicate, melancholic face. Her long, dark hair is wet and clings to her shoulders. She wears a simple, flowing light blue linen gown that is damp at the hem. Her posture is slightly hunched, and her expression is one of deep sadness and concern. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Prince ◆ supporting
Likely athletic and strong, given his activity of diving in the lake. He would have a noble bearing, but also a sense of concern and perplexity.
Attire: When in the lake, he would be unadorned. On land, he would wear fine, tailored garments appropriate for a prince of a northern European fairy tale, perhaps a tunic and breeches of rich wool or velvet, in colors like deep blue or forest green, indicative of his status.
Wants: To understand and help the Princess, and to solve the mystery of the shrinking lake.
Flaw: Unable to comprehend the Princess's deep, unspoken distress or the magical nature of the problem.
He begins as a joyful companion and becomes a concerned observer, distressed by the Princess's decline and the mystery of the lake.
Concerned, perplexed, loyal, earnest.
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A young man with an athletic build and a noble, concerned expression. He has short, dark hair and earnest eyes. He wears a tailored tunic of deep blue wool over light grey linen breeches, with a simple leather belt. His posture is upright, but his brow is furrowed with worry. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Old Princess ⚔ antagonist
Gaunt and possibly hunched, with a menacing presence. Her movements are deliberate and full of dark purpose, especially when performing her magic.
Attire: Dark, heavy, and perhaps tattered robes of a coarse, dark fabric like thick wool or homespun linen, possibly in shades of deep purple, black, or dark grey. Her clothing would suggest a life spent in solitude and dark arts, rather than courtly life.
Wants: Revenge against her niece for finding more pleasure in the lake than she did, and a desire to cause widespread suffering.
Flaw: Her overwhelming hatred and desire for revenge consume her, making her blind to anything but her malicious goals.
She is already fully established in her villainy, and her arc is one of escalating her destructive magic to achieve her revenge.
Vengeful, malicious, cunning, patient, cruel.
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An elderly woman with a gaunt, sharp face and deep-set, malicious eyes. Her thin, straggly grey hair is pulled back haphazardly. She wears dark, tattered robes of coarse, deep purple wool. Her posture is hunched, and her hands are gnarled. She holds a huge bunch of rusty keys that clatter. Her expression is a cruel, cackling smile. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Black Cat ◆ supporting
Sleek, entirely black fur, with an arched back and a tail that can stiffen like a cable when sensing magic or fear.
Attire: None, as it is an animal.
Wants: To remain by its mistress's side, perhaps out of loyalty or fear, and to observe her dark work.
Flaw: Its fear of the old princess's rage and the terrifying magical creatures she conjures.
Remains a constant, watchful companion to the Old Princess, reacting to the unfolding magic.
Observant, fearful (of its mistress's rage), loyal (to the old princess), attuned to magic.
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A sleek, entirely black cat with piercing yellow eyes. Its back is arched, and its tail is stiff and thick like a cable. Its fur is bristling slightly. It stands alert, looking upwards with an expression of fear and intense observation. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The White Snake of Darkness ⚔ antagonist
A huge, gray snake, initially appearing like a piece of dried seaweed. When revived, it grows to an immense size, capable of reaching the roof of a vast cavern. Its body is described as 'white' in its species name, suggesting a pale, perhaps ghostly, gray or off-white color, contrasting with its dark nature. It has a powerful, leech-like mouth for sucking.
Attire: None, as it is a magical creature.
Wants: To fulfill its magical purpose of draining water, driven by the Old Princess's curse.
Flaw: It is exhausted and shrivels after prolonged sucking, requiring the Old Princess's magic to revive and direct it.
Revived from dormancy, performs its destructive task, then returns to dormancy.
Mindless, destructive, obedient (to the Old Princess's magic), voracious.
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A colossal, pale gray snake with a thick, powerful body, hanging vertically from a dark, rocky cavern ceiling. Its head is pressed against the stone, and its body is slightly undulating. Its eyes are unfeeling and dark. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Locations
The Lake
A large body of water, initially deep and full of life, surrounded by rocky shores and trailing plants. Over time, its surface visibly sinks, exposing previously submerged rocks, and the surrounding banks become dry with withering grass and plants. The water becomes clear enough to see the newly exposed rock tops.
Mood: Initially joyful and beloved, transforming into desolate, dying, and fearful as it shrinks.
The princess discovers the lake is shrinking, leading to her despair and the kingdom's proclamation for a solution. The witch later curses all the springs feeding it.
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A vast, serene lake at dusk, its surface reflecting the last light of the setting sun. The water level is noticeably low, revealing smooth, dark, moss-covered rocks along the receding shoreline. Patches of dry, brittle grass and wilting aquatic plants cling to the exposed banks. The air is still and heavy, with a sense of impending loss. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
Old Princess's Secret Cellar and Cavern
A series of a hundred dark, narrow, descending passages and doors, each locked, leading to a vast, hidden cavern. The cavern's roof is supported by huge natural rock pillars and is, in fact, the underside of the lake's bottom. The cellar itself is a mundane space where the witch prepares her magic.
Mood: Eerie, secretive, malevolent, and claustrophobic in the passages, expanding to a vast, ancient, and powerful space in the cavern.
The old princess performs the ritual to drain the lake, first by growing the White Snake of Darkness and then by having it suck the water from the lake's underside in the cavern.
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A colossal underground cavern, dimly lit by an unseen, eerie glow, revealing massive, rough-hewn natural rock pillars stretching from the floor to the high, uneven ceiling. The ceiling is damp and glistening, with a single, dark, serpentine form clinging to it. On the cavern floor, a gnarled old woman sits on a large, ancient stone, knitting, with a black cat with an arched back beside her. The air is thick with a sense of ancient magic and dread. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
Old Princess's Room
A private room containing an old chest and a tub. The room is where the old princess keeps her magical implements and prepares her spells.
Mood: Sinister, secretive, and filled with dark magic.
The old princess retrieves the dried White Snake of Darkness, revives it in a tub with powder, and prepares to take it to the cavern.
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A dimly lit, cluttered chamber with heavy, dark wooden furniture. An ancient, weathered wooden chest stands open, revealing mysterious contents. A simple wooden tub filled with murky water sits on the floor, emitting a faint, unnatural shimmer. A black cat with bristling fur stands alert, its eyes wide with terror, observing an unseen presence. The room feels oppressive and charged with dark energy. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.