THE SONG THAT TRAVELED
by Maud Lindsay · from The Story-teller
Adapted Version
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Once there was a happy King. He loved spring. He sang a happy song. He stood at his window. A hawthorn tree bloomed nearby. He felt happy. He sang it loud. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
Robin the Ploughboy worked. He heard the song. He felt happy. He sang. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
The Goose-Girl heard Robin. She learned the song. She felt happy. She sang. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
The Chapman heard her. He learned the song. He walked. He sang his song. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
The Soldier came home. He heard the Chapman. He learned the song. He sang. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
The Soldier taught the Sailor. He learned the song. He sailed. He sang. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
The Sailor came home. He felt happy. He sang his song. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
The Minstrel was on the boat. He heard the Sailor. He learned the song. He felt happy. He liked it much.
The Minstrel went to the King's palace. He stood before the King. He felt proud. He sang the happy song. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
The King heard the song. He liked it much. But he did not remember it. He felt surprised. "My song?" he thought.
The King asked The Minstrel. "Where did you learn it?" The Minstrel said, "The Sailor." The King asked The Sailor. The Sailor said, "The Soldier."
The King asked The Soldier. The Soldier said, "The Chapman." The King asked The Chapman. The Chapman said, "The Goose-Girl."
The King asked The Goose-Girl. The Goose-Girl said, "From Robin the Ploughboy."
The King asked Robin the Ploughboy. Robin smiled. He said, "You sang it first, King!"
The King understood. His happy song traveled far. It made many people smile. The King felt happy. He sang his song again. The sun is bright. The sky is blue. I am happy. Yes, it is true.
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Original Story
THE SONG THAT TRAVELED
ne day when all the world was gay with spring a king stood at a window of his palace and looked far out over his kingdom. And because his land was fair to see, and he was a young king, and his heart was happy, he made a song for himself and sang it loud and merrily:
"The hawthorn's white, the sun is bright,
And blue the cloudless sky;
And not a bird that sings in spring
Is happier than I, than I,
Is happier than I."
Now it chanced that a ploughboy at work in a field hard by the palace heard the king's song and caught the words and the air of it.
He was young and happy and as he followed his plough across the dewy field, and thought of the corn that would grow, by and by, in the furrows it made, and of his little black and white pig that would feed and grow fat on the corn, he sang:
"The hawthorn's white, the sun is bright,
And blue the cloudless sky;
And not a bird that sings in spring
Is happier than I, than I,
Is happier than I."
"A right merry song, Robin Ploughboy," called the goose-girl who tended the farmer's geese in the next field; and she leaned on the fence that divided the two, and sang with him, for she was as happy a lass as ever lived in the king's country.
The farmer's wife had given her a goose for her very own that day, and the goose had made a nest in the alder bushes. There was already one egg in it and soon there would be more. Then she would send them to market; and when they were sold she would buy a ribbon for her hair. It was no wonder that she felt like singing:
"The hawthorn's white, the sun is bright,
And blue the cloudless sky;
And not a bird that sings in spring
Is happier than I, than I,
Is happier than I."
SHE LEANED ON THE FENCE THAT DIVIDED THE TWO.
The chapman,[5] from whom she bought her ribbon in all good time, learned the king's song from her; and as he trudged along the king's highway with his pack upon his back he, too, sang it; for there is no better weather for peddling or singing, either, than that which comes in the spring.
[5] A peddler.
A soldier just home from the wars, and glad enough to be there, had the song from the chapman; and in turn he taught it to a sailor who took it to sea with him.
The sailor was going to the far countries, but if all went well with his ship, and with him, he would be at home in time to see the hawthorn bloom in his mother's yard another year and another spring.
He kept the song in his heart for a year and a day, and then, because nothing had gone amiss and he was homeward bound, he sang it, too:
"The hawthorn's white, the sun is bright,
And blue the cloudless sky;
And not a bird that sings in spring
Is happier than I, than I,
Is happier than I."
On the sailor's ship there was a minstrel bound for the king's court to sing on May Day; and the minstrel learned the song from the sailor.
He was a young minstrel and very proud to sing at the king's festival, so when it was his turn and he stood before the throne he could think of no better song to sing than:
"The hawthorn's white, the sun is bright,
And blue the cloudless sky;
And not a bird that sings in spring
Is happier than I, than I,
Is happier than I."
Now the king had been so busy about the affairs of his kingdom deciding this question and that, sending messengers here and there, and listening to one and another, as all kings must do, that he had forgotten the song which he had made. But when he heard the minstrel it all came back to him; and then he was puzzled.
"Good minstrel," said he, "ten golden guineas I will give you for your song, and to the ten will add ten more if you will tell me where you learned it."
"An easy matter that," said the minstrel. "The sailor who rides in yon white ship in your harbor taught it to me."
"The soldier who even now stands guard at your majesty's gate gave me the song," said the sailor when he was asked.
"I had it from the chapman who travels on the king's highway," said the soldier.
"I heard the little goose-girl sing it," said the chapman when they found him.
"'Tis Robin Ploughboy's song," laughed the goose-girl. "Go ask him about it."
"The king sang it first and I next," said the ploughboy.
Then the king knew that he had made a good song that everybody with a happy heart might sing; and because he was glad of this, he stood at his window and sang again:
THE SONG THAT TRAVELED
Words, Maud Lindsay
Music, Elsie A. Merriman
Allegretto
The hawthorn's white, the sun is bright, And blue the cloud-less
sky; . And not a bird that sings in spring Is
hap-pi-er than I, than I, Is hap-pi-er than I. . .
Story DNA
Moral
A simple song of happiness can travel far and connect many hearts, reminding us that joy is universal.
Plot Summary
A happy young king sings a joyful song about spring. A ploughboy hears it and sings it, then a goose-girl learns it from him, a chapman from her, a soldier from the chapman, and a sailor from the soldier. After a year, a minstrel learns the song from the sailor and sings it before the king. The king, having forgotten his own song, is puzzled by its origin and traces its journey back through the chain of people, realizing his simple song of happiness has traveled throughout his kingdom, bringing joy to many.
Themes
Emotional Arc
joy sustained
Writing Style
Narrative Elements
Cultural Context
Reflects a pre-industrial, hierarchical society where news and culture spread by word of mouth and travel, often through common folk.
Plot Beats (17)
- A happy young king sings a song of joy from his palace window.
- A ploughboy working nearby hears the king's song and begins to sing it, finding joy in his work and future prospects.
- A goose-girl hears the ploughboy's song and learns it, singing it happily because she received a goose and expects eggs.
- A chapman learns the song from the goose-girl and sings it as he travels the highway.
- A soldier, returning from war, learns the song from the chapman.
- The soldier teaches the song to a sailor who takes it on a long voyage to far countries.
- After a year and a day, the sailor, homeward bound and happy, sings the song.
- A minstrel on the sailor's ship learns the song from him.
- The minstrel travels to the king's court and sings the song during a May Day festival.
- The king hears the song, recognizes it as his own, but has forgotten it and is puzzled about how the minstrel knows it.
- The king questions the minstrel, who credits the sailor.
- The king questions the sailor, who credits the soldier.
- The king questions the soldier, who credits the chapman.
- The king questions the chapman, who credits the goose-girl.
- The king questions the goose-girl, who credits the ploughboy.
- The king questions the ploughboy, who reveals the king sang it first.
- The king realizes his song has traveled through his kingdom, bringing joy to many, and sings it again.
Characters
The King ★ protagonist
A man of regal bearing, likely of average height and a fit build, accustomed to a life of comfort but also the responsibilities of his station. His complexion is fair, indicative of his European heritage, and his hands are well-kept.
Attire: A finely tailored tunic of deep blue velvet, embroidered with subtle gold thread along the collar and cuffs, worn over a white linen undershirt. He wears fitted breeches and soft leather boots. A simple gold signet ring on his finger. His attire is practical for his duties but clearly denotes his royal status without being overly ostentatious.
Wants: To govern his kingdom well and to find joy in life. Initially, to express his personal happiness; later, to understand the journey of his song.
Flaw: Can become preoccupied with affairs of state, leading him to forget personal joys.
Starts by creating a song from personal happiness, forgets it due to royal duties, then rediscovers it through his subjects, realizing the widespread impact of his simple joy.
Happy, observant, creative, responsible, curious.
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A young European king standing upright, facing forward, full body visible from head to toe. He has a noble profile, bright eyes, and light brown hair styled neatly. He wears a deep blue velvet tunic with subtle gold embroidery, white linen undershirt, fitted breeches, and soft leather boots. A simple gold signet ring on his finger. He has a happy, thoughtful expression. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Robin Ploughboy ◆ supporting
A sturdy, well-built young man, tanned from working outdoors in the fields. His hands are calloused and strong from manual labor. He is of average height, with a healthy, robust physique.
Attire: A simple, coarse linen tunic in an earthy tone, perhaps a muted green or brown, with rolled-up sleeves. He wears sturdy wool breeches and practical leather boots caked with mud. A leather belt cinches his tunic.
Wants: To work his land, provide for himself (and his pig), and find joy in his daily life and the promise of the harvest.
Flaw: Perhaps a bit naive, easily content with simple pleasures.
Remains consistently happy and hardworking, serving as the first link in the song's journey.
Happy, hardworking, optimistic, observant, content.
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A sturdy young European ploughboy standing upright, facing forward, full body visible from head to toe. He has a sun-kissed, open face with bright eyes and short, disheveled brown hair. He wears a coarse linen tunic in a muted green, with rolled-up sleeves, sturdy wool breeches, and mud-caked leather boots. A leather belt is cinched at his waist. He holds a wooden plough. He has a happy, contented expression. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Goose-Girl ◆ supporting
A cheerful and lively young woman, likely slender but strong from her outdoor work. Her skin is fair but with a healthy flush from the sun. She is of average height.
Attire: A practical, long-sleeved linen smock dress in a natural, undyed cream color, worn with a sturdy wool apron, perhaps in a muted blue or green. She wears simple leather shoes or wooden clogs. Her clothing is functional for her work with geese.
Wants: To care for her geese, earn money for a ribbon, and find joy in her daily tasks and small aspirations.
Flaw: Perhaps a bit easily distracted by her dreams and happiness.
Remains consistently cheerful and hopeful, passing the song along with her joy.
Happy, optimistic, resourceful, cheerful, dreaming.
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A cheerful young European goose-girl standing upright, facing forward, full body visible from head to toe. She has a round, pleasant face with rosy cheeks, bright eyes, and light brown hair braided simply. She wears a cream linen smock dress, a muted blue wool apron, and simple leather shoes. She is leaning casually on a wooden fence. She has a bright, happy smile. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Chapman ◆ supporting
A lean and weathered man, accustomed to long journeys on foot. His face is tanned and lined from exposure to the elements. He is of average height, with a sturdy build from carrying his pack.
Attire: A practical, durable wool tunic in a muted brown or grey, worn over a linen shirt. He wears sturdy wool breeches and well-worn leather boots. A wide leather belt holds a small pouch. His most prominent feature is a large, well-packed canvas or leather backpack.
Wants: To sell his wares, make a living, and enjoy the simple pleasures of travel and good weather.
Flaw: Perhaps a bit focused on commerce, though not unkind.
Learns the song and carries it further along the road, demonstrating its spread through commerce and travel.
Practical, observant, resilient, opportunistic (in a good way), cheerful.
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A lean, weathered European chapman standing upright, facing forward, full body visible from head to toe. He has a tanned, lined face with observant eyes and short, dusty brown hair. He wears a durable muted brown wool tunic, linen shirt, sturdy wool breeches, and well-worn leather boots. A wide leather belt holds a small pouch. He carries a large, well-packed canvas backpack on his back. He has a resilient, friendly expression. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Soldier ◆ supporting
A strong, disciplined man, likely tall and muscular from military service. His face might bear the faint marks of past battles, but he is now relaxed and content. His skin is tanned.
Attire: A practical, sturdy wool tunic in a military green or dark blue, with leather bracers on his forearms. He wears dark, fitted breeches and tall, polished leather boots. A simple leather belt with a small, sheathed dagger. His uniform is functional and clean, indicating he is off-duty but still carries himself with military precision.
Wants: To return home safely from war and enjoy the peace of his homeland.
Flaw: Possibly carries the burdens of past conflicts, though not explicitly shown.
Represents the journey of the song through military life and the joy of returning home.
Disciplined, relieved, content, observant, loyal.
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A strong, disciplined European soldier standing upright, facing forward, full body visible from head to toe. He has a resolute but softened face with alert eyes and short, dark brown hair. He wears a military green wool tunic, leather bracers, dark fitted breeches, and tall, polished leather boots. A simple leather belt holds a small sheathed dagger. He has a content, watchful expression. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Sailor ◆ supporting
A robust and adventurous man, with a sun-weathered face and strong arms. He is of average height, with a sturdy build from life at sea. His skin is tanned.
Attire: A practical, striped linen shirt (blue and white), worn under a sturdy dark blue wool jacket. He wears wide-legged canvas trousers and heavy leather boots. A knotted rope belt. His clothing is well-worn but clean, suitable for a long voyage.
Wants: To travel to far countries, return home safely, and see his mother's hawthorn bloom again.
Flaw: Long periods away from home can be a hardship.
Carries the song across the sea for a year and a day, demonstrating its ability to travel vast distances and endure time.
Adventurous, hopeful, resilient, patient, joyful.
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A robust, adventurous European sailor standing upright, facing forward, full body visible from head to toe. He has a sun-weathered, jovial face with keen eyes and short, windswept dark brown hair. He wears a blue and white striped linen shirt, a sturdy dark blue wool jacket, wide-legged canvas trousers, and heavy leather boots. A knotted rope belt is tied at his waist. He has a hopeful, cheerful expression. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
The Minstrel ◆ supporting
A slender and artistic young man, with graceful hands and a pleasant demeanor. He is of average height, with a light build.
Attire: A finely woven tunic of forest green linen, with delicate silver embroidery along the neckline. He wears fitted dark breeches and soft leather slippers. A small, decorative pouch hangs from his belt. His attire is elegant but practical for travel and performance.
Wants: To perform at the king's court, share his music, and gain recognition for his talent.
Flaw: Perhaps a bit nervous or overly eager to please when performing for royalty.
Brings the song full circle back to the King, unknowingly completing its journey and revealing its widespread impact.
Artistic, proud, observant, talented, respectful.
Image Prompt & Upload
A slender, artistic young European minstrel standing upright, facing forward, full body visible from head to toe. He has a refined, expressive face with bright eyes and neatly styled light brown hair reaching his shoulders. He wears a forest green linen tunic with delicate silver embroidery, fitted dark breeches, and soft leather slippers. A small decorative pouch hangs from his belt. He holds a finely crafted wooden lute. He has a confident, expectant expression. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Locations
King's Palace Window
A grand window within a medieval European palace, likely made of stone with arched openings, overlooking a vast and fair kingdom. The interior would be richly appointed, but the focus is on the view outside.
Mood: Joyful, serene, regal
The king first sings his happy song, and later, after the song has traveled, he sings it again, realizing its impact.
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A wide, arched stone window of a medieval European palace, looking out over a verdant, rolling kingdom in full spring bloom. Distant hawthorn trees are visible, covered in white blossoms. Bright, clear morning sunlight streams through the window, casting soft light on the interior stone sill. The sky outside is a brilliant, cloudless blue. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
Dewy Plough Field
A freshly ploughed field, still dewy from the morning, adjacent to the king's palace grounds. Furrows are visible, ready for planting. A simple wooden fence separates it from another field.
Mood: Industrious, hopeful, simple joy
The ploughboy hears the king's song and sings it himself while working, sharing his simple happiness.
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A wide, open, freshly ploughed field in early spring morning. The dark earth of the furrows is still visibly dewy, reflecting the bright, cloudless blue sky. In the middle distance, a simple, weathered wooden fence runs horizontally, separating this field from another. Beyond the fence, a few hawthorn bushes are in white bloom. The light is crisp and clear, highlighting the textures of the soil. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
Goose-Girl's Field with Alder Bushes
A grassy field where geese graze, separated from the ploughed field by a wooden fence. Alder bushes grow along one edge, providing cover for a goose's nest.
Mood: Pastoral, innocent, contented
The goose-girl hears the ploughboy's song, leans on the fence, and sings it, happy about her new goose and its nest.
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A sun-drenched, vibrant green grassy field in spring, where several white geese are contentedly grazing. A rustic, weathered wooden fence runs through the mid-ground, separating this field from another. Along the far edge of the field, a cluster of dense alder bushes with their distinctive catkins provides a natural boundary. Bright morning sunlight illuminates the scene, casting soft shadows. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
King's Highway
A well-traveled dirt or gravel road, winding through the king's lands, suitable for a peddler with his pack.
Mood: Journey, open road, freedom
The chapman, having learned the song, trudges along this road, singing it as he peddles his wares.
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A wide, well-worn dirt highway winding gently through rolling green hills under a bright, cloudless spring sky. The road surface is a mix of packed earth and small stones, showing signs of travel. Sparse, budding trees line the distant edges of the road, with patches of wildflowers in bloom along the verges. Golden afternoon sunlight bathes the landscape, creating long, soft shadows. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
King's Court (May Day Festival)
The grand hall of the king's palace, decorated for a May Day festival. A throne is prominently placed, and there's an audience gathered.
Mood: Festive, formal, expectant
The minstrel performs the song before the king, bringing it full circle back to its origin.
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The interior of a grand medieval European palace's great hall, adorned for a festive May Day celebration. High, arched windows allow bright, clear spring afternoon light to flood the space. A magnificent, carved wooden throne sits on a raised dais at one end. The hall features tapestries on stone walls, and possibly banners or floral arrangements. The floor is polished stone or timber. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.