Stories about snakes
by Brothers Grimm
The Little Snake's Gift
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Every day, Lily sat by the wall. She had milk and bread. And every day, a little snake came out.
The snake was small and green. It came from a hole in the wall. The sun was warm. Lily smiled. "Come eat with me, little snake!"
The snake dipped its head in the milk. It drank and drank. Lily ate her bread. They sat together in the sun.
The little snake liked Lily. It brought her gifts. One day, a smooth shiny stone. One day, a red berry. One day, a soft feather. "Thank you, little snake!" Lily said. She was so happy.
The snake drank all the milk. But it did not eat the bread. The little crumbs sat in the bowl. Every day, the bread stayed.
Lily laughed. She took her spoon. She gave the snake a gentle tap. "Eat the bread too, little snake!" The snake looked up. It wiggled its little head.
Then Mama came out. She saw the snake. "Oh no! A snake!" Mama was scared. She ran at the snake. "Go away!" The snake hid in the wall. It went back in its hole. "Snakes are not safe," Mama said.
Lily was sad. She sat by the wall. But the snake did not come out. She put milk in her bowl. She waited. No snake came. Lily did not eat. It was not fun alone.
Mama saw Lily by the wall. Lily was very sad. "What is wrong?" Mama asked. "I miss my friend," Lily said. "The snake was kind to me. It gave me gifts. It sat with me."
Mama looked at the little stone. She looked at the red berry. She looked at the soft feather. "The snake gave you these?" she asked. "Yes," Lily said. "It was my friend."
Mama felt sorry. "I did not know," she said. They put milk by the wall. They waited. Then the little green head came out. The snake looked at Lily. It looked at Mama. Lily smiled. "It is safe," she said. "Come eat, little snake."
The snake came out. It drank the milk. Mama watched. She smiled too. "I am sorry, Lily," she said.
And every day after that, they sat together.
Original Story
Stories about snakes A fairy tale by the Brothers Grimm There was once a little child whose mother gave her every afternoon a small bowl of milk and bread, and the child seated herself in the yard with it. When she began to eat however, a snake came creeping out of a crevice in the wall, dipped its little head in the dish, and ate with her. The child had pleasure in this, and when she was sitting there with her little dish and the snake did not come at once, she cried, "Snake, snake, come swiftly Hither come, thou tiny thing, Thou shalt have thy crumbs of bread, Thou shalt refresh thyself with milk." Then the snake came in haste, and enjoyed its food. Moreover it showed gratitude, for it brought the child all kinds of pretty things from its hidden treasures, bright stones, pearls, and golden playthings. The snake, however, only drank the milk, and left the bread-crumbs alone. Then one day the child took its little spoon and struck the snake gently on its head with it, and said, "Eat the bread-crumbs as well, little thing." The mother, who was standing in the kitchen, heard the child talking to someone, and when she saw that she was striking a snake with her spoon, ran out with a log of wood, and killed the good little creature. From that time forth, a change came over the child. As long as the snake had eaten with her, she had grown tall and strong, but now she lost her pretty rosy cheeks and wasted away. It was not long before the funeral bird began to cry in the night, and the redbreast to collect little branches and leaves for a funeral garland, and soon afterwards the child lay on her bier. Second Story. An orphan child was sitting on the town walls spinning, when she saw a snake coming out of a hole low down in the wall. Swiftly she spread out beside this one of the blue silk handkerchiefs which snakes have such a strong liking for, and which are the only things they will creep on. As soon as the snake saw it, it went back, then returned, bringing with it a small golden crown, laid it on the handkerchief, and then went away again. The girl took up the crown, it glittered and was of delicate golden filagree work. It was not long before the snake came back for the second time, but when it no longer saw the crown, it crept up to the wall, and in its grief smote its little head against it as long as it had strength to do so, until at last it lay there dead. If the girl had but left the crown where it was, the snake would certainly have brought still more of its treasures out of the hole. Third Story. A snake cries, "Huhu, huhu." A child says, "Come out." The snake comes out, then the child inquires about her little sister: "Hast thou not seen little Red-stockings?" The snake says, "No." - "Neither have I." - "Then I am like you. Huhu, huhu, huhu." * * * * *
Moral of the Story
Interfering with nature's trust or acting out of greed can lead to tragic and irreversible consequences.
Characters
Child ★ protagonist
Initially rosy-cheeked and strong, later pale and wasted
Attire: Simple peasant dress appropriate for a child in a German fairy tale setting
Initially gentle and kind, later weakened and passive
Snake ◆ supporting
Small, described as 'good little creature'
Attire: Scales
Gentle, grateful, generous
Mother ⚔ antagonist
Not described
Attire: Simple, practical clothing suitable for housework in a German peasant setting
Overprotective, fearful, violent
Orphan Child ★ protagonist
Not described
Attire: Simple, worn clothing
Opportunistic, perhaps naive
Snake ◆ supporting
Not described
Attire: Scales
Generous, sensitive, easily grieved
Child ★ protagonist
Not described
Attire: Simple peasant dress appropriate for a child in a German fairy tale setting
Curious, inquisitive
Snake ◆ supporting
Not described
Attire: Scales
Helpful, sympathetic
Locations
Yard by the Wall Crevice
A sunny yard with a stone wall containing a small crevice.
Mood: peaceful, innocent, then tragic
The child shares her food with the snake, receives gifts, and is later struck by the spoon.
Kitchen
Implied to be a simple kitchen, connected to the yard.
Mood: domestic, fearful
The mother witnesses the child with the snake and kills it.
Town Walls
The top of a stone town wall, with a hole low down.
Mood: lonely, greedy, tragic
The orphan encounters the snake and its golden crown, leading to the snake's death.
Story DNA
Moral
Interfering with nature's trust or acting out of greed can lead to tragic and irreversible consequences.
Plot Summary
A child shares her daily meal with a grateful snake, which brings her treasures in return. When the child's mother misunderstands a playful tap and kills the snake, the child wastes away and dies. A second story tells of an orphan who takes a golden crown brought by a snake, causing the snake to die of grief. A third, brief fragment features a child and snake lamenting a lost 'Red-stockings'.
Themes
Emotional Arc
innocence to sorrow
Writing Style
Narrative Elements
Cultural Context
Grimm's tales often reflect rural German folk beliefs and superstitions, where animals could have symbolic or magical significance, and death was a more present part of life.
Plot Beats (15)
- A child regularly shares her milk and bread with a snake that emerges from a wall.
- The child calls to the snake with a rhyme when it's slow to appear.
- The snake shows gratitude by bringing the child precious items like stones, pearls, and golden toys.
- The snake only drinks milk, leaving the breadcrumbs.
- The child playfully taps the snake's head with a spoon, telling it to eat the breadcrumbs too.
- The mother, witnessing this, misinterprets the interaction and kills the snake with a log.
- The child, who had been growing strong, begins to waste away after the snake's death.
- Omens of death appear, such as a funeral bird and a redbreast collecting materials for a funeral garland.
- The child soon dies and is laid on her bier.
- A second story begins: an orphan girl spinning on town walls sees a snake.
- The girl spreads a blue silk handkerchief, which snakes like, near the hole.
- The snake brings a small, delicate golden crown and leaves it on the handkerchief.
- The girl takes the crown.
- The snake returns, finds the crown gone, and in grief, smashes its head against the wall until it dies.
- A third, very short story: a snake cries 'Huhu', a child asks it to come out and then asks if it's seen 'little Red-stockings'. Both the child and snake haven't seen her, concluding 'Then I am like you. Huhu, huhu, huhu.'
