The fox and the horse
by Brothers Grimm
The Old Horse and the Clever Fox
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There is an old horse. He works very hard. But now he is old and tired.
The master looks at Horse. "You are too old," he says. "You must go away now." Horse is sad. He looks at his home. He does not want to go.
But the master says one thing. "Bring me a big lion. Then you can stay."
The old horse walks to the forest. The trees are very tall. The leaves are green. Horse is so sad. He walks and walks. The forest is big and quiet.
Then a fox comes. Fox has a big smile. "Hello, Horse!" says Fox. "Why are you sad?"
Horse looks at Fox. "My master says I am old," says Horse. "I must bring him a lion. Then I can go home."
Fox smiles. "I have an idea!" says Fox. "I can help you!"
"Lie down," says Fox. "Close your eyes. Do not move! It is a game." Horse lies down. He is very still. Fox looks at Horse. "Good!" says Fox. "Do not move now."
Fox runs to the lion. "Hello, Lion!" says Fox. "There is a big horse. He sleeps in the forest. Come and see!" Lion stands up. "I will come," says Lion.
The big lion walks with Fox. They go to Horse. Lion looks at Horse. Horse is very still.
Fox looks at Lion. "I will tie a rope," says Fox. "Then you can pull him!" Lion thinks this is good. "Yes," says Lion.
Lion sits down. The clever fox ties the rope. He ties it very tight. He ties it round and round.
Then Fox taps Horse. "Now, Horse! Pull! Pull!" Fox says.
Horse jumps up fast! He runs and runs! Lion goes with him. Lion cannot stop! "ROAR!" says Lion. "ROAR! ROAR!" But Horse pulls and pulls. He is very fast. He runs to the master's house.
The master sees the big lion. His eyes go very wide. "You did it!" he says. "You can stay, Horse!" The master looks down. "I am sorry," he says. "I was not kind."
And so Horse stays home. He has good food. He has a warm home. The master is kind now. Fox comes to visit. They are good friends.
And Horse was happy for a long, long time.
Original Story
The fox and the horse A fairy tale by the Brothers Grimm A peasant had a faithful horse which had grown old and could do no more work, so his master would no longer give him anything to eat and said, "I can certainly make no more use of thee, but still I mean well by thee; if thou provest thyself still strong enough to bring me a lion here, I will maintain thee, but now take thyself away out of my stable," and with that he chased him into the open country. The horse was sad, and went to the forest to seek a little protection there from the weather. Then the fox met him and said, "Why dost thou hang thy head so, and go about all alone?" - "Alas," replied the horse, "avarice and fidelity do not dwell together in one house. My master has forgotten what services I have performed for him for so many years, and because I can no longer plough well, he will give me no more food, and has driven me out." - "Without giving thee a chance?" asked the fox. "The chance was a bad one. He said, if I were still strong enough to bring him a lion, he would keep me, but he well knows that I cannot do that." The fox said, "I will help thee, just lay thyself down, stretch thyself out, as if thou wert dead, and do not stir." The horse did as the fox desired, and the fox went to the lion, who had his den not far off, and said, "A dead horse is lying outside there, just come with me, thou canst have a rich meal." The lion went with him, and when they were both standing by the horse the fox said, "After all, it is not very comfortable for thee here I tell thee what I will fasten it to thee by the tail, and then thou canst drag it into thy cave, and devour it in peace." This advice pleased the lion: he lay down, and in order that the fox might tie the horse fast to him, he kept quite quiet. But the fox tied the lion's legs together with the horse's tail, and twisted and fastened all so well and so strongly that no strength could break it. When he had finished his work, he tapped the horse on the shoulder and said, "Pull, white horse, pull." Then up sprang the horse at once, and drew the lion away with him. The lion began to roar so that all the birds in the forest flew out in terror, but the horse let him roar, and drew him and dragged him over the country to his master's door. When the master saw the lion, he was of a better mind, and said to the horse, "Thou shalt stay with me and fare well," and he gave him plenty to eat until he died. * * * * *
Moral of the Story
Even the old and seemingly useless can prove their worth through cleverness and help from unexpected allies, and ingratitude can be overcome.
Characters
The Horse ★ protagonist
Old and no longer able to work, implying a worn appearance.
Attire: None, as an animal.
Faithful, sad, obedient, strong (when motivated).
The Fox ◆ supporting
A cunning fox, likely with reddish-brown fur.
Attire: None, as an animal.
Cunning, intelligent, helpful, manipulative.
The Peasant ⚔ antagonist
Undescribed, but implied to be a working man.
Attire: Simple peasant clothing, perhaps a smock or tunic.
Avaricious, ungrateful, initially cruel, later repentant.
The Lion ⚔ antagonist
A large, powerful predator, with a den not far from the forest.
Attire: None, as an animal.
Gullible, proud, ferocious (when roaring).
Locations
Peasant's Stable
The horse's former home, from which he is driven out.
Mood: Initially safe and familiar, then becomes unwelcoming and cold.
The horse is cast out by his master.
Open Countryside
The area immediately outside the stable, where the horse is chased.
Mood: Desolate, exposed, reflecting the horse's sadness.
The horse's initial moment of despair and abandonment.
Forest
Where the horse seeks protection and meets the fox; also where the lion's den is located.
Mood: Initially a place of refuge, then becomes the setting for the fox's cunning plan and the lion's capture.
The horse meets the fox; the fox devises his plan; the lion is tricked and tied to the horse.
Master's Door
The entrance to the peasant's home or farm, where the horse delivers the captured lion.
Mood: Tense anticipation, then relief and triumph.
The horse presents the lion to his master, securing his future.
Story DNA
Moral
Even the old and seemingly useless can prove their worth through cleverness and help from unexpected allies, and ingratitude can be overcome.
Plot Summary
An old, faithful horse is cast out by his ungrateful master, who challenges him to bring a lion as a condition for his return. A clever fox helps the despondent horse by tricking a lion into believing the horse is dead and then tying the unsuspecting lion to the horse's tail. The horse then drags the roaring lion back to his master, who, impressed by the feat, takes the horse back and cares for him until his death.
Themes
Emotional Arc
suffering to triumph
Writing Style
Narrative Elements
Cultural Context
Reflects a pre-industrial society where animals were primarily valued for their utility and old age could lead to abandonment.
Plot Beats (15)
- An old, faithful horse is deemed useless by his master and denied food.
- The master challenges the horse to bring him a lion to earn his keep.
- The horse, sad and alone, goes to the forest.
- A fox encounters the horse and asks why he is sad.
- The horse explains his master's ingratitude and the impossible challenge.
- The fox offers to help the horse.
- The fox instructs the horse to lie down and pretend to be dead.
- The fox goes to a nearby lion's den and tells the lion about a 'dead horse' for a meal.
- The lion follows the fox to the horse.
- The fox suggests tying the horse to the lion's tail so the lion can drag it to his den.
- The lion agrees and lies down, allowing the fox to tie him securely to the horse's tail.
- The fox taps the horse and tells him to pull.
- The horse springs up and drags the roaring lion to the master's house.
- The master sees the lion and is impressed, taking the horse back.
- The horse lives out his days well-fed and cared for by his master.
